Comments on: Chapter Ten

By: Clifton Hill

Clifton Hill — Tue, 08 Dec 2009 23:07:06 +0000

Definitely getting hooked on the story. I agree, that I see a flavor of Modesitt here, though I’ve only read the first book, so I don’t know what else I might be missing. But I like your pacing better. Modesitt’s didn’t quite work for me most of the time. Though once he got into the meat of his story I started to enjoy it.

If you flesh this out to a full novel, I’d like to see a little more connection between each chapter, but that’s just me.

I’m interested to see what you do with these “Killer Trees”. I like how you handled that scene, though it was cheesy, you managed to connect the reader with the skepticism of the characters who don’t buy it any more than we do, but then at the end I think we are all left thinking, “Hmm…maybe those trees really are something horrible, I guess we’ll just have to see…”

By: Kenneth Godwin

Kenneth Godwin — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 05:21:31 +0000

I’ll definitely check out your flash fiction.

By: Patrick Hester

Patrick Hester — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 02:51:21 +0000

Yeah, I write in Word and sometimes the bold, italics and whatnotall -they don’t come through.

Hope you’re liking it, though.

As for that webfictionguide.com – I went there, registered – but you don’t really have to register if you just want to submit your stuff for review – they have a separate link for that. Worth checking out.

By: FARfetched

FARfetched — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 01:44:55 +0000

Thanks for setting off the flashback… I got a bit confused the first time I read it, thinking Millie was on board with Elias somehow.

I’ll have to checkout that webfictionguide site too… I’ve posted a fair amount of fiction on my site too & it would be nice to get some readers & feedback.

By: Patrick Hester

Patrick Hester — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 00:36:41 +0000

Kenneth,

First off – thank you. I’m glad that you like it. Please tell all your friends!

Second – clever, clever boy. You are correct in assuming some influence from Modesitt. Meeting him recently made me dig this story out, dust it off and put it online.

I assure you, though there is a definite flavor of Modesitt here, I have very different twists – no Druids here nor Chaos/Order balance.

Thanks for the link – I will check it out. You should also check out http://www.atfmb.com and click on ‘Flash Fiction’ – lots of fun stuff there as well.

By: Kenneth Godwin

Kenneth Godwin — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 00:27:15 +0000

This is better than most weblit I read.

Although, I think Modesitt’s influence is glaringly obvious. I was wondering about it even before I went and read The Writing on TNU. That may be a trace more obvious than you may want.

The ‘exile’ for ‘Cyador-style Forest Containment’.

Just my two cents for what is worth.

P.S.
If you want more readers, http://webfictionguide.com/ , is a directory for this sort of thing.